This was written in 1966 apparently, and as I have been rewiriting the
early parts of The Story, I had forgotten all of this and that this
history existed... so I will make some notes on what we decided to do with
the discrepancies.
| What
was written then |
What
is being written now |
| In May of 762., Lawrence and his father and elder brother set out to
war. They stopped in the Kingdom of Affynshire at the castle of the king.
There Prince Lawrence met Josephine, the king of Affynshire's daughter.
They fell immediately in love, tho' the princess had been promised as a
child to Lawrence's elder brother Arneth. Lawrence was then but 16,
Josephine 14. |
Well... in the
rewrite none of this happens. Instead Lawrence and Josephine
were betrothed in 756 when he was 8 and she 6. They do not see
each other again until just before their wedding in June 766 but
fall in love immediately. |
| That summer Lawrence's father was killed in battle. On the return home,
after a peace was declared, they learned that the dead king's brother had
usurped the throne. In a battle Arneth, now king, was killed by his uncle,
but in revenge, Lawrence killed him. |
OK, more changes... in the rewrite the usurping was only
attempted and Arneth Sr. and Jr. are both killed in a battle with the
uncle, whom Lawrence kills. |
| It was now 764, and Lawrence was crowned. He sent immediately for
Josephine, and they were married. About that time Lawrence's sister
Lorelee died. Their mother had been dead for 11 years. |
In the rewrite I had Lorelei/Laurel die just after the new King gets
back from the war. The mother had died while her husband and two
eldest sons were at war. |
| Not long after their marriage, the Queen's father died and Lawrence
rode to Affynshire to inspect his inheritance. Along the way he was
ambushed and barely made it to safety. He was given refuge by a group of
outlaw men. |
Ok, OK, in the rewrite I say that the King and Queen of Affynshire
were both murdered... I'll figure this out somehow... And Peter has to fit
in here somewhere. Maybe that's how Roland got Josephine to submit
to his advances, by threatening to kill Peter in infancy. My head
hurts. |
| The usurper was his brother Roland, one year his junior. Roland a man
nearly mad, took not only his lands, but his wife as well. In the summer
of 765, she bore his son, and named him Rolance. |
In the new version
Roland rapes her once, but he dies before she gives birth to
his child. His bame will be Breoghan, not Rolance. |
| Not long before the child
was born, Roland was caught by Lawrence's fellows, and imprisoned. He
escaped, but after a battle in which he was nearly the victor, he was
killed. Others held the throne, until that winter, when Lawrence regained
it. He turned to his capital to find that the Queen had taken refuge in
France. |
In the newer
version, Roland is deserted by his supporters and Lawrence kills him
in a sword battle. There are no "others" who held
the throne. |
| He set about building a new capital, moving from central
Christenlande to a seaport on the southeast coast. His people named it
Lawrencium, in his honor, since the money for homes and businesses for the
commons came out of his pocket and the kindness of his heart. |
I have him doing
this as a way to reward those, especially the outlaws, for
supporting him and also to have a better defensible capital. |
| In December of 765, the King and Queen were finally reunited. He had
had a chance to visit her a year before, but it had been in secret. Now he
was able to present her his new capital. But, as fate would have it, a war
sprang up between Avon and Christenlande, and Lawrence was off to lead his
armies. The Queen was sent up to Sheffield, her birthplace, for safety.
She learned at this time that she was pregnant. Lawrence was wounded badly
and the at the war's end, he went to the manor of Asec-dene to recuperate.
The Queen went back to Lawrencium. |
No way they visited
in secret.
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| At Aesc-dene, Lawrence's senses were
beguiled by a sorceress named Aelflynn and finally, he disappeared for a
week or two. He was found groggy at a peasant's cottage, Aelflynn was
found murdered. Nobody knew who ad done it, but it was generally thought
that the King did. |
Rehabilitated
Aelflynn.. in the new version she is a healer who saves the King's
life or at least his leg. Her brother kills her when she warns
the King he plans to try to extort something from him. The
King just had an argument with her and is seen coming out the woods
where her body is found. Rumors fly that the King killed her
becuase she was threatening to tell the Queen he had bedded
her. Which he had not. |
| The Queen, fearing that the King was not only faithless, but dead,
despaired and took up the veil at Petersborough Nunnery. When he did
return, she refused his pleas in anger. There in August of 766, their
first child was born, Prince Peter Maurice. |
The KIng arrives at
what is now the Convent of St. Helen's not too fart from Lincln, now
the capital, just in time to be there for the birth of Peter.
He and Jo eventually iron things out about Aelflynn. |
| An important character who enters now is Sean Of Connery, a Scottish
minstrel. He at the time was quite a ladies man, but a year hence he
marries Emily, a peasant girl and settles down. He is one of the King's
dearest friends and helps him through this crisis. |
"this crisis."???
Aelflynn? This one is still being discussed. |
| Finally (argghh!) the Queen relents and they are almost happy again;
she was allowed to return to worldly life by the nunnery, and they are
reunited in Lawrencium. |
See two sections
above. |
| Of course, they are separated again. When the Queen learns that Rolance
is dying, she takes him to Sheffield to be with him until he dies, in
October 766. |
Rolance/Dreoghan is
already dead in the new version, so this just does not happen. |
| This is where the
earlier history file ends. |
So I am left to find
the Robert story somewhere else.. or? |
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